Dragon Den Pitch continued

Feedback to Final idea 

After showing a group of friends my pitch I got quite a lot of positive feedback. Most of them really liked the plot for the film and thought it suited the genre of a thriller/drama film. They thought that the plot gave away just enough for the opening two minutes of a film without giving away too much or being too boring. They also liked the idea of introducing a third character through the missing persons poster to help show the drama that is occurring and with the stalker following the teen it also gives the opening that sinister, thriller feel to it. 

One thing that one of my friends suggested was to make it more obvious who the stalker was. After showing them my Pitch they didn't really understand who the stalker was and why they were stalking the teen in the first place. After I elaborated that is was her uncle, he suggested that I should try and make that more obvious in my opening as otherwise people wouldn't understand. I did think about changing this, especially because I didn't want people to get the wrong impression on why this guy was stalking the teen, though I decided against it. I wanted to keep the identity of the man a secret from the audience, and if this was to be made into a full length film then his identity would be reviled dramatically in the middle of the film. Being a stalker as well means that people shouldn't know who he is which another reason I wanted his connection to the teen not to be shown in the first two minutes. Keeping his identity secret also gives the audience a chance to interpret who they think he is, and it gives them freedom to try and work out his plan and connection to the teen. 

 

The feedback I received has definitely made me more determined to continue with this idea for my coursework. By working alone, every decision I make is down to me and because of that I never have a second input from someone to reassure me that what I’m doing is the right choice. By having positive feedback from others has helped to reassure me that my idea isn't too crazy and that it might actually make a good film opening.